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    A few of his many eyes flashed a baleful red.
    They often flashed red, especially when he felt someone was following him too close.
    He was a big guy, but in truth he was also paranoid. Maybe because of his size.

    If someone stepped on his shoes, no matter whether he was moving or not, his eyes turned red for quite a while.
    His shoes were a possible saving grace. He felt his shoes all the time. Many didn't pay them any attention.

    Why are you following me this close? he'd think and his eyes would flash red again.

    They were bright red, sometimes the only thing others could see about him in thick fog or other inclement weather.
    Some thought him a demon of some sort. Others were just annoyed.

    Ignore me at your peril, he thought.

    He sometimes wondered if he was a demon, too.
    The main thing he knew for sure was that he'd killed people in the past, a nasty business. It might happen again anytime.

    That didn't improve his mood at all. He was cantankerous and ornery.
    Sometimes he could forget those deaths for weeks at a time, but they never really left his mind. Nothing did.

    His paranoia about himself extended throughout his body. In that way, he helped the current truck driver who sat at his steering wheel hear it if anything was wrong with him. He also put on his red brake lights without the driver, if needed.

    That was one reason some wouldn't use him. It was also a reason he was popular with others. Some were honest, some weren't. But he was honest and never completely forgot anything, not one thing throughout his long life, particulary death.     
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013   Writer
I really wonder why the DLD stamp is by this story, since I doubt it got a DLD without further notice.
Crazythewaytobe Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It still amazes me the things you can write about, the colour red in this case:p It doesn't seem to be as in depth as a lot of the other pieces you write, however I don't know if that's how this piece is supposed to be. Still such an interesting take on red, being a painter red is almost exclusively used to express either romance(love, flirtation est.), power, other worldly creatures or concepts(gods, angels, demons), anger/ danger or joy/ happiness. I like how you do use some of these elements in your piece, the red eyes in the fog being mysterious and dangerous, people thinking he's a demon so that element of danger and/ or power to him. Like the kind of person you'd see lurking in allies in a leather trench coat you just want to avoid, so the red danger element again. You're mixing it all up with him being this cool and collected killer kind of character who stays in the shadows. I don't know I just think it's cool how you can balance two colours or I guess two character themes so well in such a short span of writting.
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013   Writer
Thanks, Zee. Is it as cold there as it is here lately?
Well, for most Californians it's waaaay too cold. For me, it feels just right.
I think your comment on this story is most interesting.
I wish I could say more about it, and I will when this contest is over.
Crazythewaytobe Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Probably a lot colder here, I live in Northern Canada:p For a while our high was -22:noes: it's been warming up to -5 and 0 lately though:) It's been perfect weather for igloo building though(obviously all us Canadians live for that ha ha:p):XD:
Definitely look forward to hearing from you again:)
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013   Writer
Only once (for about five years) did I live where it was always really cold, at high altitude in ski country in Colorado.
The coldest day I saw there was -42. :noes: I went for a walk because, even though every night people plugged their radiators to electric poles so the antifreeze wouldn't freeze, that night/day everything else froze! I saw a distant neighbor under their vehicle, lighting a small fire in attempt to warm it. I didn't even linger -- that certainly looked dangerous to me!
Crazythewaytobe Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No doubt:p Coldest I've been in was -40 something. One of the craziest things I was a part of though in 1997 or something there was a huge ice storm in Ontario(where I lived at the time) we had to chisel around our neighbour's door so they could get out and my dad being brilliant as can be:doh: lit a fire under our car as well, the e-brake was so frozen he couldn't budge it or cut it and he ruined the car's exterior, he had to chisel the doors to get us into it as well... Ya good winter times:p
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013   Writer
Zounds! That sounds really awful. At least nobody in ski country that day had to chisel any doors!
Crazythewaytobe Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ya that`s a good thing but fires under cars not good at all either:doh:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013   Writer
:nod: Fires under cars can too easily lead to explosions, in my opinion.
rlkirkland Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, very nicely plotted. :)
Good luck! :) :)
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