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Dream one was a bright white flash
and sounds of things breaking
I opened my eyes and saw it all.

Now I think that it was me.

Dream two was my child yelling
"Where are you? Where are you?"
I opened my ears and heard it all.

Now I think that it was me.

Dream three was a sudden knocking  
on the door in deepest dark.
I opened the door and saw nothing.

Now I think that it was me.
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WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013   General Artist
this is interesting. I like the simple points, it leaves a lot open to interpret but can still tell it's own story. Very nice work :heart:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013   Writer
:iconthankyousignplz:
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WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013   General Artist
:heart:
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Oana-Mihaela Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013   Photographer
Is so powerful! AN entire life just crossed to my imagination suddenly in only few lines...
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013   Writer
Thank you, and also for the fave. :love:
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Oana-Mihaela Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013   Photographer
Is the least I can do to...repay you! :love:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013   Writer
:heart:
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MorbidKittyCorpse Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Professional General Artist
Very interesting poem. I really liked the structure and the repetition made me think of Sylvia Plath's "Mad girl's love song" Wonderful work!
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013   Writer
*MorbidKittyCorpse - you made my night brighter.
To compare this piece to any work by Sylvia Plath makes me very happy :love:
And thanks for the :iconorangesparklesplz:
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giga22 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
interesting, not sure what its bout or getting at, but I like it
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