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Dream one was a bright white flash
and sounds of things breaking
I opened my eyes and saw it all.

Now I think that it was me.

Dream two was my child yelling
"Where are you? Where are you?"
I opened my ears and heard it all.

Now I think that it was me.

Dream three was a sudden knocking  
on the door in deepest dark.
I opened the door and saw nothing.

Now I think that it was me.
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:iconworldwar-tori:
WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013   General Artist
this is interesting. I like the simple points, it leaves a lot open to interpret but can still tell it's own story. Very nice work :heart:
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013   Writer
:iconthankyousignplz:
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WorldWar-Tori Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2013   General Artist
:heart:
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Oana-Mihaela Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013   Photographer
Is so powerful! AN entire life just crossed to my imagination suddenly in only few lines...
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013   Writer
Thank you, and also for the fave. :love:
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Oana-Mihaela Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013   Photographer
Is the least I can do to...repay you! :love:
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013   Writer
:heart:
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MorbidKittyCorpse Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Professional General Artist
Very interesting poem. I really liked the structure and the repetition made me think of Sylvia Plath's "Mad girl's love song" Wonderful work!
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013   Writer
*MorbidKittyCorpse - you made my night brighter.
To compare this piece to any work by Sylvia Plath makes me very happy :love:
And thanks for the :iconorangesparklesplz:
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giga22 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
interesting, not sure what its bout or getting at, but I like it
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013   Writer
It's about three dreams I actually had, and how I felt when I woke from each.
They happened the same night -- in a row, just like they are here.
(It's odd to write from dreams, I'll give you that, and I rarely do it.)
Still, thanks very much for letting me :iconswingonastarplz: by liking this piece.
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unknown-sources Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013
I like this!
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013   Writer
:iconthankyousignplz:
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LaptopNinja510 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice :3
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013   Writer
I'm very pleased you like this, and like enough to give a star. Thank you!
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LaptopNinja510 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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CarmineDevian Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Student Writer
Sounds like a very interesting personal reflexion, I like it
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013   Writer
Yep. This one is true. Glad you like it :)
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:iconcarminedevian:
CarmineDevian Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Student Writer
=)
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:iconcallingallmonsters:
CallingAllMonsters Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very nicely written. c:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013   Writer
And you're very nice to say so! And to give it a fav. :iconthankyousignplz:
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CallingAllMonsters Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem! It deserves the favorite. c:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013   Writer
c:
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Xiaooyu Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
woah!! O_O so pretty
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013   Writer
Thanks, ~xJasmin3x-ART!
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Xiaooyu Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem! :hug:
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Artsouls143 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Professional Filmographer
superb lines
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013   Writer
thank you :)
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:iconartsouls143:
Artsouls143 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Professional Filmographer
you are welcome
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Wilmsy Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh wow...this is so beautiful! :iconpyongiluplz: Wonderful flow, your words definitely struck a chord deep in me. :hug:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013   Writer
Your words ...struck a chord deep in me.. made me happy. I'm honored they did. Thank you. :hug: And :iconthxfavplz:!
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Wilmsy Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconfoxyayzplz: You're so very welcome! :iconexcitedlaplz:
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FiyeroTigelaar Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This......is so wonderful.....GHHAAAAAA I love it!!!
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013   Writer
Thanks very much, ~FiyeroTigelaar! And :iconthankuplz: ... :heart:
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FiyeroTigelaar Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are so welcome, thanks for writing this!
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013   Writer
:boing::boing::boing: ... Ahaha, I don't know how to respond!
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013   Writer
=P
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TheAnimalsRight Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
More great works
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013   Writer
Ahaha. Thank you very much.
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girl-withagun Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
very interesting... I'm glad to see you've continued writing. I hope you are well! :heart:
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   Writer
Hey, it's ~girl-withagun! Glad to 'see' you here.

I'm okay.
My daughter is even improving with lots of therapy.
It's very slow going, since it's so very fast at being "degenerative," but she keeps working and is stronger in her arms than I am.
She most often uses a custom-made motorized wheelchair now, though.

As I recall, you wanted to share information on M.S. Am I right? :note: me?
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girl-withagun Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Yes, I'm finally back! It's good to 'be' here.

I'm glad to hear that.

Yes, definitely. Sending you one now. :)
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   Writer
Thank you. Will look for it soon(ish).
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girl-withagun Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Absolutely. Sent it. :)
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   Writer
Got it and replied.
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girl-withagun Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
oki :)
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Zenemystic Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013
lol nice!

I hope it was you in those dreams... some of the events are a bit chilling lol
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   Writer
It was. This one is nonfiction. And I agree about this being "a bit chilling" because the dreams were.
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IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the repetition! Really cool poem. :la:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013   Writer
:iconlainloveplz:
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